As we moved into Editing our Opinion Essays last week, I realized my students and I needed to improve our word choice. Clearly, many of us had quickly drafted our essays using simplistic words that simply could be better. I chose a strategy that I typically show students when we need better details in our narratives, The Tell-Show. On a hunch, I thought this strategy would provide us with a quick fix for Better Words.
Ditch Those "Crappy" Words for Better Ones
I chose a paragraph from my draft and explained that I simply wasn't happy with some of the words I'd chosen to use in my first draft. I re-read one of my paragraphs and underlined the words that I knew could be better. Then, I picked one sentence in this paragraph, wrote it on the board, and labeled it Original Sentence:
Every summer, I remember Mom Mom (my grandmother) and Sugar (my grandfather) would get out of the heat and travel to places like Alaska, Colorado, or Oregon.